A practice serve... please critique

[tianna{HUL}]

(20:32:03 ) [PIC]
tianna{Hul}
Restricted bondmaiden
Hulneth Island - GRP
In Training

: Enters the room...


(20:38:56 )
tianna{Hul}
Restricted bondmaiden
Hulneth Island - GRP
In Training


is within the Great Hall of the North and says to ALL: *the petite girls paters with a lively step and bright, wide, sparkling green eyes into the main halls. Just inside the door she pauses momentarily, a soft, contented smile plays on plump, pink lips. she peers about tossing a tendril of long, ruddy curls back over her shoulder. Soft lips pressed she takes a breath, exhaling with a soft "hmmm" sound before advancing into the bustling Main Hall*


(20:43:36 )
tianna{Hul}
Restricted bondmaiden
Hulneth Island - GRP
In Training


is within the Great Hall of the North and says to ALL: *she moves through the Hall shoulders back, head high greeting those she passe with a sweet smile and symphony of boisterous giggles as she moves towards the ice room*


(20:46:36 )
tianna{Hul}
Restricted bondmaiden
Hulneth Island - GRP
In Training


is within the Great Hall of the North and says to ALL: (oops er...make that servery, forgot a step) *blush)


(20:53:37 )
tianna{Hul}
Restricted bondmaiden
Hulneth Island - GRP
In Training


is within the Great Hall of the North and says to ALL: *she steps inside the servery placing tint fists against her hips, reddish lashes fluttering briefly she spies a particularly attractive jug adorned with a skilled etching of the hillsides of Hulneth on its shiny surface. she takes a few steps forward and stretching to her full height on pointed tip toes she reaches up, taking the large jug carefully between small tanned hands she holds it tightly taking it down and placing it on the counter top. Tucking red curls behind her ears she peers inside and finding the vessel spotlessly clean she takes it in her right hand by the handle and pads off to the cold room humming softly*


(21:05:08 )
tianna{Hul}
Restricted bondmaiden
Hulneth Island - GRP
In Training


is within the Great Hall of the North and says to ALL: *Moving with silent barefooted steps into the cold room she shivers briefly as she scans the room for the mead cask. Spying it with bright green eyes she walks over and stoops down, making sure to bed first at the knee, the motion sending a cascaed of hair tumbling down the left side of her glowing cheek. she holds the jusg with her right hand (how large it seems in comparison to the tiny Earth girl) and places it beneath the spiggot turning it with her left hand she watches intently as the liquid fills the jug. Rising to her full height she shakes her long red hair out of her way and moves on pointed toe back into the lively main area, hips swaying slightly as she walks*


(21:10:33 )
tianna{Hul}
Restricted bondmaiden
Hulneth Island - GRP
In Training


is within the Great Hall of the North and says to ALL: *Spotting a Jarls yet unattended she moves quickly with feline grace to his left side, stopping in a gentle sway of smooth curls and fabric. she leans in close enough to His back that he can feel the warmth of her flesh but not its caress and purrs with warm breath that tickles the ear and neck "Mead Jarl?". Green eyes expectant and eager she offeres Him a warm smile*


(21:18:05 )
tianna{Hul}
Restricted bondmaiden
Hulneth Island - GRP
In Training


is within the Great Hall of the North and says to ALL: *"Yes" He answers, motioning to the drinking horn cradled on the table. she nods, smile widening slightly she steps closer to the table, taking the horn in hand she leans her backside gently against the tables edge, tipping the jug with care and watching as the liquid fills the horn, mindful not to spill a drop. her left shoulder rises the right dropping as she cocks her head to the left, almost pressing her cheek against her shoulders smooth skin. she flutters her eye lashes cheeks flushing slightly as she offers the horn to Him* cold Mead Jarl, may it please You this eve.


(21:21:20 )
tianna{Hul}
Restricted bondmaiden
Hulneth Island - GRP
In Training


is within the Great Hall of the North and says to ALL: *He nods, pleased and she answers with a giddy giggle as He takes the horn and drinks from it. she steadys the jug in her right hand with the left and twirls away, peeking back with a girlish grin at Him as she moves to the next Jarl*


a girl knows there are a few spelling mistakes and it is a bit lengthy but she had time so *giggles*

[Sedim]

*smiles* beautiful service in practice.

The two things I would note are:
1-To my knowledge, the main hall doesn't have a servery (and if it does, I apologize *S*), all the food/drink etc are at or near the firepit.

2-It may not be perfectly realistic to this particular situation, but washing the hands before you start a food or drink service is almost universally mandatory in roleplay. The Frees in most Homes would throw a snit-hissy about it if ya skipped that step.

You really are doing beautifully *smiles warmly* Can't wait ta see more

[tianna{HUL}]

excellent advice. she'll be doing even more beautifully with all Your help

simply,
tianna